Is this My Life?

...is quite engagingly entertaining. It absolutely captured that secret inner voice we all posess that does the planning, the manipulating, and the justifying to ourselves as if it helps render us incognitively aware of whome we're really deceiving.
The only snarl I came upon was when I read it aloud. The two times you used the same word twice in a stanza, for a rhyme bothered me immensly.
Guess I'll have to just get over, myself; eh?
Anyway, it was a fine effort,
sincerely;
doc.

Is this my life
I'm a downtrodden wife

I like these two lines together somehow,
as they have a fine lilt.

Nice and simply told story.
I am not sure that I wouldn't prefer it closer together even with less lines,
the lay out doesn't say anything to me, so that seems a tiny bit pretentious,
and in a poem like this isn't needed, unless I suppose you wanted it to
seem an endless waiting for the end. Yes its just the double spacing.

If this is autobiographical it makes me sad, for all concerned.
love Ann.

Agree with Ann's comment about the line spacing...other than that 'Ann's biding her time /secret vodka and lime/ behind his back a naughty rhyme'...great lines. Would like to see you have a play with images (figurative language) in your writing, lifting this from a sort of rant to something more memorable.

Ells x

Much better flow :))

You have done well in describing the plight of way too many women whose husbands treat them like a piece of funiture then are astonished when they get served with divorce papers. The only improvement I can come up with would be the possible use of more imagery to draw the reader in a bit more......................stan