The art to love
life longevity
is to play
the game
Know the rules
then break some
not all
chaos
is so draining
but I've played
Backgammon
with ancient
Greeks
Rhodes town
Mandraki harbour
they beat me
obviously
I didn't know
their
rules
But the game
unfolded like
a Rubic's cube
fiendishly
simple-clever
Dark shiny pebbles
burning into
my celtic reserve
tracking my every
move
the ouzo left
greasy white
trails
The pebbles
grew darker
with concentration
mine fluttered
weakly
The drachma pile
waxed and waned
mostly waned
from my side
I was distracted by
younger pebbles
the apprentice gods
chewing the fat
with their
municipal fraternity
The Adonis that
sat next to his uncle
lifted the well trailed
glass
the gossamer imprint
pressed to my lips
focus ebbed away
the old pebbles
twinkled
the game plan
worked
'beware greeks bearing gifts'
indeed.
Comments
Indeed!...
I enjoyed this one from start to finish. I don't don't often do freeform poetry myself, but I can appreciate it. This is an excellent example to me. The little punch-line at the end is typical of something I might add if I had written a similar piece. Nice! ~ Geezer
Hi Geezer
Thanks for your comments, I'm glad you appreciated the punchline, it came to me about halfway through the writing of the piece...cliched, I know, but it seemed to fit! I've decided freeform is my milieu, so i'm trying to produce the best form of it I can with as many different themes as I can...They are all a work in progress!
Ells x
Hi Mr C
Glad it gave a chortle...lovely word, can imagine you doing it..rich, fag-seasoned tones! As I said to Geezer, the punch-line is a bit cliched, but it seemed to fit well...and I did actually do this when I was a student... a beautiful Adonis called Constantine Spanoudis actually drank from my glass. After all these years can remember him in every detail. Still rubbish at Backgammon!
Mrs C x
Distraction works
Fabius cunctator a general in the war sent out to distract
Thomas mans death in Venice the beautiful boy distracting the old man,
And in your case I can even see the young Adonis
Thanks For the feedback!
Hi Frenchf, He was so handsome...left an imprint, dark curly hair, dark liquid pools of eyes, perfect olive skin, musculature, virility...my 'perfect' man. Spent 20 odd years using that as a model, consequently 20 years of misery! (However, have just recently married a man that is curly-haired, dark eyed, handsome enough to be my perfection!)
Ells :)
Definitely time to move on
As you have at last achieved your goal
Well done xxxx
Heya Ells
I really liked this one I felt like I was sitting there watching the game, my favourite lines
The Adonis that
sat next to his uncle
lifted the well trailed
glass
the gossamer imprint
pressed to my lips
I love that ending its just wonderful
love Jayne-Chloe xxx