Seren

Jan 10, 2013

alone with the blues

I grow tired, weary in fact
looking into
the heart of loneliness
I shiver and buckle
at the knees

left alone I am spinning
looking into
an abyss of despair
I am swallowed
as glass tears shatter

birds of paradise
lay dead
the sunrise refuses
to shine
the orchid declines
to grow

beauty has taken a day off
and I am again alone

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

ah so sad but such a lovely

ah so sad but such a lovely write enjoyed every word x

Thanks Sue

I am really glad you enjoyed it thanks for the read and the comment its much appreciated

love JC xxx

Hello JC

you so eloquently remind each of us, how we do in fact ending up carry our burdens alone....
At least this 'dark place' has aligned you with your re-newed creative abilities.
Regards

ello Boni

how true that is

(At least this 'dark place' has aligned you with your re-newed creative abilities.)

I have had a hole in my creative fabric but its mended now the words are just flowing out now, I forget how to slow it down lol

hugs and love JC xxx

If it is...I'm there too! January skies all around me here...colour grey. Cold, grey endless months of drabness ahead! Love the line 'beauty has taken a day off'...brilliant summary of how I feel at the moment.

Happy 2013...hahahhaahha

Ells xx

hey Ells

Don't rightly know what's causing my blues ... It's sunny and hot as hell here wish it was cloudy and grey lol glad you related to the poem

Love Jc xxx

Beautiful word "Blue" did loved get you going? She did me!

I love the fact that you share time with your beauty. Appropriate in your case
Eleanor Rigby-- "face in a jar by the door" beautiful Beatles lyrics

Not sure who got who going I

Not sure who got who going I think I posted mine before loveds
Glad you liked it thanks for the comment much appreciated

Hugs Jc xxx

sure enough

you did compose it ere me
but I only got inspired by thee
do pardon me
I thought I'd left a comment on your poetry

You all are far above my level
that any poet here
can blindly see ..
so my thanks and regrets
to Serendipity

thank u friendly Frenchy

We are all equal in Gods eyes !

And that is a fantastic reply xxxx

Smiles

its doesnt matter who inspired who Lovedly :) its all good in the world lol ;)

love JC xxx

on second thought

This bluish poem was composed after I'd read Eskers poetry

HIS quote*

i will or would look out for all those who are in ....BLUES PLEASE VISIT ESKER'S POETRY

*if poetry were all..... red dots
I would be the one
to examine the ..........green"..

then I composed mine Hope all is placed in place now Misunderstood again Thanks Frenchy

Which wart of an island are you on?

Yes I too hate winter. I am being particularly afflicted as I am near the Irish Sea and its grey grey grey
Every day day day and I feel SAD( seasonal affective disorder) creeping up on me!

Drive 6 and a1/2 hours for money

Live in SE and drive near to Irish Sea to work no wonder I'm sad sad sad

Awwwww thanks Ephy

I needed to hear some positive words and your lovely message cheered me up no end :) its good to see you back around again its been way too long since you have been around ... glad you liked my little write I am working on a few other writes as well so I hope you like those as well

love and hugs Jayne-Chloe xxx