sueb
sueb
Jan 09, 2013

Sealed With A Kiss

Love teases
flirting pleases
games excite
passion ignites
unspoken desire
mind on fire
beautiful fantasy
make reality
absolute bliss
sealed with a kiss

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

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Comments

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 3 months ago

A passion sandwich, title to last line a fun write, must be an old man's dream, and a young ones reality lol, Yours Ian.T

sueb

ah thanks Ian for reading and commenting glad u enjoyed I write these things better than what they are lol didn't get a chance to read yours last night will get to it today much appreciated all the best sueb x

Seren

Seren

12 years 3 months ago

I liked this little poem but I have to say I would have chosen another title a lot of people title their poetry with lines from the poem but I like to provide a clue to the write in the title, mine of late havent been all that great I am working on titles at the moment

nice work

love JC xxx

sueb

Hi Jc I have tried to do that lately with some of poems never thought of it before till someone here mentioned it was a pet hate maybe it was yourself don't know why I didn't do it with this one glad u enjoyed this little one hope your well all the best sueb x

Seren

It wasnt me (the pet hate) but it sometimes ruins the ending when the title is the last line, When I was first here all I wrote was rhyming poetry I have come a long way since then and I know you will grow as a poet I think you show potential

JC xxx