VOL DE NUIT [ title from from novel by St. Exupéry]
Je me sens les yeux
se fermer
lourds comme le plomb
crevés
creux
comme ceux d’un mort
qui sourient
ces yeux à moi.
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Je me sens l’esprit
s’endormir
léger
timide
rendu
comme un oiseau
perdu
dans son vol de nuit
cet esprit à moi.
NIGHT FLIGHT
I feel my eyes begin
to close
heavy led
sunken
empty
like the smile of the dead
these tired eyes of mine
I feel my spirit begin
to sleep
light
frightened
like a bird lost
in night flight
this torn spirit
of mine.
Comments
it was meant to convey as you
it was meant to convey as you felt it.
joe
Joe
Good trip to shallow sleep as all do on aircraft trips, one very small thing the line that goes:- "heavy led" there is some sort of typo there..
Did you mean as Heavy as lead, or "heavy, leaden" the short word led seems wrong.. Take care young man, Yours Ian.T
thanks, Ian ; and will fix
thanks, Ian ; and will fix error,
Joe
Technically the poem seems more than adequate, but the message is all too sad. I can feel the weightiness of the content so much that I want to "put it down"and walk away. It is as T.S.Eliot says-
"Human kind cannot bear very much reality"
I hope it processed some of the sadness for you, if so it served its' purpose.
Regards
Then I did my job--to create
Then I did my job--to create strong feeling. And what is true is powerful.
Be well and enjoy the moment.
I agree, you did just that.
I agree, you did just that.