Sufficiently Breathless

Not one thing
can better describe

the essence of a soul's own vibe,

than what prompts a heart to quicken
like a bird's;

we've both shared
footprints shadow made

but, sunlit footprints never fade;

love leaves us breathless,
with narry a need for words.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

coudl be better formatted

...is this better suited for your formatting tastes?
This way i'ts a little more, elongated; ya know?
thanx,
doc.

and shake my head. I wasn't very helpful, was I? However this is a good revision in terms of edits and formatting, good job.