A deep hurt!
at times my heart weeps,
though rarely
when I see machinations
manifested in crooked minds,
seeking the fish from under the Dead Sea
when all are asleep,
wantonly
and
in pity seek a false admiration
to reach out for empathy,
callous folks still exist
I hate to say
but still
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I can
very much relate to this . Palestine , syria and many other places are suffering and we can't do anything but weeping.
Thanks for sharing.
yes each one of us should be able
to relate to this
at some time of one's life
as much as you do tooo
this is a poem where your
this is a poem where your unique writing
style really works.
so often, for me, it doesn't...sorry
the first thing that struck me about this, was
the sense of honesty it contains.
after reading this, there was no doubt in my mind
you meant what you wrote. and, you've expressed
those feelings cohesively, and eloquently
it's a sentiment that could be felt about a
myriad of situations the world over
i very much enjoyed this
thank you
cheers
p
I am indeed indebted to you
grateful thanks
Loved
Just like reading a quatrain from some well known Doctor, A little puzzlig but the truth of things that will and do happen.
Well written young Bard, Yours Ian.T
I hionestly appreciate
each word you relay Ian
thanks
I understand, one of your better poems
But the last line sucks. But still what? 'But still' means nothing. You could do better.
but still
I shall fill in the gap
you visualise
still!