Seren
Seren
Nov 14, 2012
This poem is part of the workshop:

fixed verse – it's not a curse

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In the seeds of sunflowers

Between the fibers
of this page,
an ancient magic
has been laid

Pressing leaves
with mystical power,
kissing the corners
to grow sunflowers

Cherish a word
a wish or rhyme,
making it grow
deep in your mind

Taking the letters
that are your divine,
weave them into
a master design

Make your own mold
and pour yourself in,
to not be yourself
is the greater of sins

Feel the earth
beneath your feet,
build your own kingdom
a heartlands retreat

With the gift of hands
you can shape a world,
and the only barrier
is what your mind holds

Sowing the seeds
you collected through life,
tend them with love
they will flourish with light

Dream with your heart
and ever be true,
the universe will gather
just to know you

After searching for faults
letting pride blind my eyes,
I stripped off all masks
to soar a blue sky

Now planting my seed
with love in my sight,
I wish it to flourish
a precious long life

Covering these pages
in tendrils sublime,
Thus binding loves magic
I send it through time

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

judyanne

i don't read this as free verse as you have tagged it

beautiful quatrains - you should pop it into my workshop - lol even if you don't write any more form poems you still will have contributed to mine with a perfect example of one ... let me know if you will and i'll add you to the participant's list...

i so love the most
'Dream with your heart
and ever be true,
the universe will gather
just to know you '

love judd
xxx

Seren

I would love to add this one to your workshop I will work on it a little while I am gone I wont be back till monday, is that too late ? I would also love to attempt more forms so I will take a through look at the workshop and its rules thanks for the read and comment glad you liked it

love n hugs JC xxx

Seren

I look forward to the workshop I will add a few I havent submited here most of them rhyming, and a few different forms I am playing with ... your workshop sounds awesome and flexable for me

I will post my poem on Monday night when I get back I will be looking for something to distract me

love and hugs JC xxx

judyanne

so now you click on edit and go to the workshop box and highlight fixed verse

add all future poems this way - all workshop poems go into an extra stream as well as the main stream - and each workshop stream is found at the right hand side of the workshop page
xxx

Seren

Thanks for the invite I have a couple of forms I have been playing with that are giving me grief I will submit them here and hopefully get some world class help ;)

I will try and write something new for monday

love n hugs JC xxx

BettyBuff

I really enjoyed the line 'make your own mold and pour yourself in'...like you can take on any form...I like the allusion in that. I'm sure this will be thoroughly critiqued in Judyanne's workshop, but as she said, it's a good model to start with. I'm still not confident enough with quatrains...but i'll get there and let Judyanne rip it up! LOL

Ells x

Seren

I didnt write this one in any particular form, I just wrote it, I have been playing on and off with this poem for nearly two years, its time it got finished lol

thanks for the comment and the read its always appreciated

love and hugs JC xxx