I open my mouth
To taste Selene's ambrosia
She pour it to me -
A cascade of silver rays
Overspilling
Its sweetness burns my eyes
Its bitterness
Stings my lips
- The pain
Makes me want to bite my lips
But I love feeling this tingling
Yes. Her wine is bitter-sweet
It's lonely to drink alone
I raise my hand
And ask for another cup
And once more
She pours it to me
In a graceful movement
Of her ethereal hands
She showers it to me
Feeling its coldness on my skin
Its dazzle enveloping my very being
Its rays like wings
Tears - twin streams
A silent grasp for air
Swallowing a lump
While drowning - drunk and free
I dance and sing
Loving this euphoria
In the absence of rationality
And happiness in state of madness
Engulfing the potion
Celebrating the ruins of the world
Enjoying the view of a shattered sky
I'm drowning in the sea of oblivion!
Savoring the taste -
Of a drink only the gods can consume
Why we, humans, are deprived
Of such a powerful drink?
But...I'm losing my sanity
In state of a lovely delirium
Under the spell of the night
Free and wild
While drinking under the moonlight
Devouring the sky
Drinking the cure for mortality
Healing myself from normality
And yes! A toast!
To the goddess who shares this with me!
To a true senseless self
Worth living for than being sane!
Yes! To madness!
It's lonely here
So come join me!
Nov 10, 2012
Drinking With The Moon
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Lately, I'm having a hard time connecting to this website T____T
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hi Gardenia
I really loved your poem but I felt that it needs to be broken up into stanza's the way it sits now it reads like a list, it will give your words more emphasis and impact ...
my favourite lines
A cascade of silver rays
Overspilling
Its sweetness burns my eyes
Its bitterness
Stings my lips
- The pain
Makes me want to bite my lips
But I love feeling this tingling
Yes. Her wine is bitter-sweet
kindest regards Jayne-Chloe
Cheers to madness! Skaal.
I cannot find it, I wanted to quote Su Tung Po, an ancient Chinese poet+ as he loved to get drunk and go walks beside lakes with his friends, lifting his cup of wine to the moon, but, as I said I didn't find it. It was something, coming from such a fantastic mind like his, that amused me specially about him. The Gay Genius is the title of Lin Yutang's book, he was a character, not only writing verse, but a politician,...the list is long.
I too think it would look a nicer chain of words with breaks for breath here and there, as Jayne Chloe says. Some very nice evocative images here.
I will come and join you, where? Love Ann.
lovely poem
lovely poem