sueb
sueb
Nov 09, 2012

Our Proposal

You said “What about it”

I said “What about what”

“Marriage and all that”

I didn’t look up in case you weren’t sincere

Because you are everything I hold dear

“Well” you said

I lifted my head

We looked at each other

Our smiles you couldn’t smother

I don’t think either of us actually ever did propose

Things just happened I suppose

It was just decided there and then

Now we’ve chose the place and when

Being a recession

We just had a session

The ring has to wait

More important that we get our date

Deposits are paid on music and venue

Were still deciding on the menu

I know a surprise you’ll spring

When I do get that ring

We’re both over forty

And oh so flirty

Wouldn’t it be such a laugh

To stick out our tongues for a photograph

Just a reminder for anyone who’s lonely

He or she is out there looking for you only

We’ve found love, we fit like a glove

So remember it’s never to late to meet your soul mate

Ray loads of hugs ‘n kisses
Can’t wait to be your missus

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

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sueb

sueb

12 years 5 months ago

Hi Thanks and yes this was my first ever attempt at writing a poem I wrote it a year ago and though its not gr8 it won the photographer for my wedding so its special to me have a gr8 day

Seren

Seren

12 years 5 months ago

welcome to Neopoet !!, I agree with Jess work on the vocab and expression I think you show some real promise, I look forward to watching you grow I have been with Neopoet for a few years now and I have watched first time writers grow to be some of our best poets ...

thanks for your kind comments on my poems

kindest regards Jayne-Chloe(JC)