Look
is what
most people do
at the world as they pass by
Look at the forests
at the crowds
at flocks migrating
at clouds in an autumn sky
Look at the waves
of waters tossed by gusting wind
or rushing streams
grain fields that bend
But as you look, don't merely look
don't skim the details rapidly
take the time to really see
that the whole world is poetry
Last Few Words: another attempt at free form
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hi stan
Interesting poem that begins as free-form but halfway through takes more of the shape of a form-poem. Your images are very clear although they are ones I've seen many times before. I am convinced you are doing exactly what you intend
to do, and therefore have to say it is a very successful poem. It's a pleasant and pastoral tableau you've painted and your point couldn't be any more relevant or true. Good work Stan!
Ron
Hi Ron
Thank you. I continue to explore the hybrid form of mixed free form and rhyme which I suspect is the direction in which poetry is moving. Thanks for dropping by..............stan
The world...
gives constant epiphanys, and I think you get them all the time. Another successful piece of work! ~ Gee
hello Gee
Too many people rush past so fast they don't really see what the world holds. I have been lucky enough to occasionally have time to examine what there is to see and then try to pass it on..................stan
I am taken in by the use of form here
a style definite!
it works very well
I enjoyed reading this
and there is nothing
I want to change..
Esker
greetings Esker
Considering the source I consider this high praise indeed. I always Try to use form as a punctuation in free verse but am never sure if it will hinder or distract until I hear back from others. Thanks for the time to read and respond...................stan
Stan
I do hope that the mixing of form and free verse is the new way of poetry.
I think that first we have to define what poetry is trying to do.
Is it to make a discipline for the poet making him conform to laid down forms of writing taken up by thousands of poets, Or to just write for other to read taken up by Millions in free speech and free verse.
Am I now too old to enjoy this new freedom of writing that is arriving, and in the future will be talked about for many years???
Can you imagine in 100 years a load of scholars reading our words and analysing the process, and saying ("He must have been so free in his/her thoughts to be able to write like this about so many things")
I do try to write in correct form for one or two lines, then well we all know the end product lol.
It will never convince me that if we cannot conform to the rules we cannot play the Game, if that is so we shall make another Game, with other rules,
or with NO rules.
Shall we call it Lyric's Of Vectored Energy or LOVE for short, then we can all write with LOVE and have fun...
LOVE your writing welcome to LOVE,
Yours, Yenti...
Hi Ian
I think all are aware that my preferred form is western classic but I see more and more poetry being written here and elsewhere that is basically either free form or western classic but which also contains elements of the other.It Would be nice to be around another 50 years to see what happens wouldn't it?..............stan