perfumed explosion

and i really like it
- wouldn't suggest you change a thing

love judy
xxx

I liked the opening a lot, spontaneous and unusual, and It workded for me until 'memories untold' where the rhymes of told, folds and old changed the free verse, conversational style into something closer to rap. I still liked it but the change of style is obtrusive.

socially I was inept
my first real girlfriend smoked
some kind of cowboy cigars
wore plaid shirts and listened
to David Bowie (Ziggy Stardust)

I didnt really hang out in the
smokers crowd where a lot
of social ness goes on

everyone done up in perfume
and cologne back then
but I remember them
envying how they moved
comfortable

I took lights in time eventually
from women
and my women at the time
Clinique my one girl wore
and something heavy and
darkly lyrical another

it was like a signature
but the explosion fits
In Sears at the perfume
counter I go in and spray
their brand and remember

narcotic memory

I like how the poem rolls
along...Your breathe much
life and vigour into these
works

Thank You Loved!

Like I observe much in life
I describe much
but you my dear write like you
do Live

"open..to now"

but I do this often myself
I think it was a common storytelling poetic thing
tell a beginning story and
then drop it into the beat of poemwerk as I call it
But its nothing too abrupt

It would for me be akin to a gate
this shift in my head
or a hallway from a great room

from those lines..

Thank You