wesley snow

Nov 28, 2011

A Triolet

I write for poets penning not for laughs,
for unlike them I have no funny bone.
Thence trusting said attempt would spark the gaffes,
I write for poets penning not for laughs.
Far be it I should write our epitaphs,
exposing barren wit that cause one moan.
I’ll write for poets penning not for laughs,
for unlike them I have no funny bone.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: My first triolet. Tear it apart. wesley

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Southern California, USA

Favorite Poets: Tolkien

Comments

Your funny bone is plain to see

Your funny bone is plain to see
and tickles me with musely glee
oh, write for fun or fucks or tears
it all comes down to test of years
sometimes to shock is cause enough
to call your sullen reader's bluff
but when you give your reader humour
ideas can grow, much like a tumour.

Wes, this is wonderful. Can't

Wes, this is wonderful. Can't type more--woud like to be more specific;

Joe

Thanks guys.

Just another in a list of experiments. wesley

Wesley

I did try to write in triolet, but came unstuck,
the syllables seem to run a muck.
In "Hidden Love" a place I tried,
before I go into my dark room to hide,
could you help with this kind of piece
So that I can get some peace
Thank you in anticipation
For helping me from another nation. La La

Whoops Silly shit I should have just asked, Yours Ian.T

Of course Ian.

I'll get to it if you post it. It may some time as I am slow these days, but don't sweat it... a triolet is hard. I hope Judy includes it in her upcoming workshop.
wesley

Creativity

is far better than lengthivity
you prove me...
How'z your epic-y poetry

All this is being said
humourly,
as a facet of ingenuity

My epiky poetry is cranking.

Please, if you've the time or inclination, check out "canto six, rough draft". It's only the first one hundred lines and is the first time I have posted what I was currently working on. It is technically "Book Two, Canto Six". Effectively it is the 67th canto in the story. me.

Hello.

A silly question: what is a triolet? I know it is a style of poem, but what are the rules? Even not knowing what it is, I enjoyed it anyway! Good humor!

Thanks for reading my poem "Fusion"

always, Cat

Hey Cat,

A triolet is a French form of eight lines. Lines 7 and 8 repeat lines 1 and 2. Line 1 is also repeated as line 4. The rhyme scheme is a-b-A-a-b-A-B. They are written in iambic tetrameter.
It is the first of the rondeau family to appear in and around the late thirteenth century. Adenez-le-roi included one in his "Cleomades" in 1290, so it's quite an old western form.
Although I've read some that were a little heavier, the form is usually reserved for light verse.
Here is a goofy one by Espy.

"O try, O try a triolet!~
O try, O try! O try, O try
A triolet to win you pet!
O try, o try a triolet!~
What if the triolet's all wet?
The trial yet will catch her eye
O try, O try a triolet!
O try, O try! O try, O try!"

So give it a shot.
wesley