docmaverick
docmaverick
Sep 27, 2012

My Twin Rainbow Supreme

I spied a Rainbow Grande one time
I could've hit it with a stone,
the sun opened wide the way her morning does
so I watched the twin rainbow, alone.

Serendipity's grande gesture sent glowing rays
flooding my eyes with awed radiance,
it was too much to see by myself,
but I absorbed it's entire brilliance!

Humbled am l as l try to say words
that accurately tells all that it brings;
this private Twin "bow" Supreme showed colors to me
with a vibrancy that taught me to make wings;

and those wings soared me higher, and ever so much
exhilarating myself through and through;
which reminds me of another dance with radiance supreme;
our eyes met but, l was alone on that day,too!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

12 years 7 months ago

I liked this one a lot. Just a little nit-picking, but you have spelled a couple of words wrong.

radiance and exhilaration. I do read your works, but don't always comment. I felt I should let you know that I liked this one. ~ Gee

docmaverick

...I fixed my fau paux on my spellings, I believe.
Thanx, again;
doc.

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 6 months ago

I loved this write it seemed to step outside your normal write of four lines and predictable patter, not that I didn't like those also..
But this is a step into another sphere, well written and a joy to read, once I was in another country and we were flying around and there was the complete rainbow as a circle it was beautiful..
Yours Ian.T

docmaverick

...it was definately a wierd moment....seeing something THAT georgeous, and not having even a stranger around, with which to share it's brilliance!
I saw it, that's what made me write outside my box. I believe l was inspired.
Thanx, again;
doc.