meeting and falling in love
fighting until push comes to shove
crying until you have had enough
feeling as though anything can be achived
things escalate until neither of you are pleased
trying to pick up the pieces as you grieve
seeing someone everyday for all that time
you whole life changes at the drop of a dime
someone you love has just finised their climb
the feeling that you will never be rejected
sometimes feeling and others not feeling accepted
you hit that point when you feel all together neglected
he wanted to be here, he wanted to stay
she couldnt take it anymore, had to get away
whether we or they wanted it or not.......
God has taken them away
this is what i want to say
my opinion will never faulter or sway
because.........
PEOPLE ALWAYS LEAVE
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loneliness
the plain old fact of life that we all try to shut out and get over everyday
very true
lots of typos in there, but that's easily fixed. the line-
'sometimes feeling and others not feeling accepted'
confuses me. maybe a word was left out?
good piece, tho.
so nullus anxietas
the_fool
Cliches
I realize that there were a lot of cliches in the poem as well and had the same forethought....i then decided that since the title subject was cliche in itself, i left them for artistic affect. i was wondering however, if it was noticable. so thank you so much for you suggestion, i felt it deseved a response.
hi Rebecca
nice flow, i like how the title and theme came into perspective at the ending. the cliches are well used though i agree with whats already said by Beau. your poetic talent shines in this piece.
hi Rebecca
nice flow, i like how the title and theme came into perspective at the ending. the cliches are well used though i agree with whats already said by Beau. your poetic talent shines in this piece.