Eclipse

By asking that question, which was proved by the previous line.

On my lips fade the smiles 'n [truly, avoid these abbreviations]

The self doubt is understandable, but you must affirm your own reality and value, not let someone else undermine it.

I know you would not use use it, but my last line would have been "fuck you".

The poetry is well written, but the message its self-deprecating.

‘On my lips fade the smiles 'n’ … as jess says – you really need to avoid the abbreviations
also the reverse syntax
I suggest ‘On my lips the smiles fade and’

also
‘she tauntingly
repaid me a shabby smile’
you have used the word smile twice already and it is a very small write
can I suggest
‘grimace’ or ‘sneer’ or ‘smirk’ ??

and the last line ??? seems to me you are still trying for rhymes that don’t quite work (within the text of the write, that is)
what is your reasoning for thinking you are insane simply because you cannot smile?

I don’t know what to suggest that won’t spoil perhaps what you are saying
but maybe something like
‘I threw the reflection away’ ??

love judy
xxx

The word quetch caught me out, but me thinks the context is slightly out:-
quetch - express complaints, discontent, displeasure, or unhappiness;

Is it only me
or do you quetch the same!
I just wonder, though a brilliant word to find that it may be out of rythme with the rest of your write in that its simplicity is hardened by such a word..
Love the theme, I am always talking about standing in front of a perfect mirror, to see what I am really like, maybe we can see that image but dis believe what it tells us. Yours as always Ian.T

Your thoughts are not silly they are quite pure in many respects and hold your individuality as a beacon..

I queried the word only because I thought that the meaning was a little off what you were saying, so now I doubt my critique lol.
I put the meaning in there, and it is an adjective, not sure if it should be???
Maybe we should consult the Oracle or one of the more read poets ??

You carry on being a beacon with your style and words they bring a subtle beauty to the site, Yours Ian.T

I like the title. This piece flows well. But I couldn't find the word "quetch" in my dictionary. What is its meaning, if I may ask? Btw, I often get sass from my reflection, lol! I enjoyed this poem.

always, Cat

I like the simplicity, directness of this little thought,
and like others was met by a new word.

I sense you could do something more with this theme
and give it slightly more story, as Jess wanted.
Perhaps a little more of the eclipse mentioned
in the title.

I agree with judyanne about changing the last smile.

Ann.