docmaverick
docmaverick
Jul 07, 2012

Each Other, Both the Skew

I spied you by the shadows
in the shadows of my mind,
you made my dreams seem dizzy, come what may;

When I left you in the shadows,
I left you off for good,
seems it's you controls what happens on this day.

You lured among the gables
lurked by the cottages,
everything went fuzzy for a while;

something went electric
in the chilly, by the hearth;
I really must insist on but, a smile.

Deep into the evening
invisibility occurred,
not to mention dizzy dreams, and come what may;

Then I left you in the shadows
in a place ye would not fear;
while you were laughing, I gently slipped away.

I viewed you in the shadows
didn't think it were my turn
but the turnstiles thread each other, both the skew;

when I left you in the shadows
I believed 'twas understood,
do this to me; 'twill happen twice, or more for you.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A rrreallllllllllll rough draft.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

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Comments

Candlewitch

I like these lines:

Deep into the evening
invisibility occurred,
not to mention dizzy dreams, and come what may;

Then I left you in the shadows
in a place ye would not fear;
while you were laughing, I gently slipped away.

It reminded me of someone dear to my heart, but now departed.

always, Cat