immersed in rich and bright illusion’s flow
here where we share a dizzy dreaming sea
within the now’s enfoldment’s gentle glow
before the birth of what’s about to be
as yesterday, today and, too, tomorrow
all breathe together forming temporal tides
and create, thus, a path for us to follow
the damaged centre’s closest friend abides
with metronome that beats both slow and fast
travails the master healer, time again
upon the wounds that live within the past
each tick a stitch to mend, divesting pain
regenerating throughout all the decades
while leaving not a scar upon the veil
until internal cyclic horror fades
and one is free, once more, to seek the grail
.
Comments
I love it Judy!
This works on multiple levels and nails every one. As a seascape description, atypical enough to not be cliche yet recognizable. The metronome analogy, as a recorder of passage of time and hence a recorder of healing. Not a missed note. I'm going to have to get your book. Great work!
Ron
thanks very much ron
for the in-depth comments
but let me warn you - my book isn't a poetry one
hope you still want to read it though :)
lol - i am in the process of re-writing the book as an epic poem - the write so far is on one of my blogs, called (surprise, surprise) 'epic' lol - for want of a title as yet
thanks again ron
love judy
xxx
Judy
A deep write of complex parts bringing together all parts to become one.
I was expecting something different as we use to deal with Sub Harmonics in the radios we used and the knowledge of how they worked with a Pure Crystal as their base yet there in the higher levels were sounds not heard and then in the sub zone sounds that though not heard you became aware of.
Well done young lady the theme was a change from love odes or whatever, Yours Ian.T
PS:- it sounds as if you are searching everywhere for an answer, that one day will ring with truth and purity, you will then cry a rainbow. x
lol ian
i NEVER write love poems :)
- and not still searching ian...
i have already cried my rainbow
just write about it now :)
love judy
xxx
Judy
I hope that beautiful peace becomes more than a part of you.
It is strange that when this happens it gives you the ability to deal with many things, and to write of more, Yours Ian.T
Dear Judyanne,
These are the lines that resonated with me:
upon the wounds that live within the past
each tick a stitch to mend, divesting pain
regenerating throughout all the decades
while leaving not a scar upon the veil
very well done
love, Cat
dear cat
thank you
your visits , and your telling me which part resounded with you are always appreciated
love judy
xxxx