HOME MOVIES-- edited

HOME MOVIES

Home movies black and white
faded celluloid 1940s
16 millimeter dry and brittle
flickering through time
a blinding light
and we splice a life
back together
again...
empty reflections
of yesterdays
flickering through time

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: USA

Comments

Try to find another word(s)

Try to find another word(s) instead of *soulless*. Maybe omit it if you can't.

Well, my opinion anyway, it's too redundant, and overused in poetry. Otherwise, this is another poem that rates another look. ;-)

ok "soulless" is gone to

ok "soulless" is gone to "empty''

ok "souless" is gone to

ok "souless" is gone to "empty''

Joe

A good theme and well presented Anna's change seems to have worked as it read OK,
Yours Ian.T
PS:- hope you are coping with things, the children send their unconditional love, Sadie and friends

Barely functional at times.

Barely functional at times. wheel chsir most of timr. sick from meds ,but I LOOK DAMN GOOD. Go figure.:)

It's been said that nature

It's been said that nature abhors a vacuum. Your Gerimia-ness remains intact. Think of all the ugly people who are well enough. rofl.