docmaverick
docmaverick
Jul 04, 2012

Bitch of a Night

Finally back from where she disappears
during wee hours of each night;
she did return
but, has to learn
she doesn't treat me, right.

Cloaked in night's midnight shadows,
night's beauty rare calls to me;
she may be here
but, that is my fear!
She may never let me be.

Adding up just how I feel for her
this goddess of twilight time;
her actions do tell
of my personal hell,
what she's doing to me is a crime!

I was happy when she was around me
then, night's canopy would beckon her, out;
"Be back in a while"
she says with a smile,
then, I'm left all alone to just, pout!

My patience are my only allies,
however, they're wearing quite, thin.
The way that she flirts
repeatedly hurts,
I must've committed some sin!

I never had great expectations,
and I know that my feelings are real;
I never assume
there's not enough room!
I need closure to end how I feel.

Before things get any more clouded
dissmissing each, and every care,
my hands are clean
you know what I mean?
This relatioship isn't quite fair!

When alone, I will finally find, solace
in the fact that, it didn't last long;
she just wouldn't "play",
so suffice it, to say
she left words, but she left me no.....song.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Bye, Honeycomb.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

12 years 10 months ago

and rhythm was great! I liked this one, because I could relate to it. I suppose that there are many who can, but I remembered a girl in particular! Good work, ~ Gee

Roscoe Lane

Loved this full of bad memories, dealt with in humour. And as Gee has stated, good rhythm and Rhyme. Regards Roscoe.