I didn't want to let him go. After all, he was only five.
‘Come on Mum,’ says Senior Seven, ‘I'll guard him with my life.’
I studied them standing tall and straight. They looked so big and grown.
I felt a strong nostalgic wave. Where had my little ones gone?
I stretched across, to get a hug as they entered through the gate,
but they both squirmed neatly out of reach. Sissy cuddles? No thanks mate.
Again the thought, 'where have they gone, my babies of last year?'
Sunrises and sets have insidiously been stealing them from me.
So, on the ghost train without me, all by themselves, they went.
And the scream began the moment they disappeared into the tent.
It was a shriek, it didn't stop. And the journey was very slow.
The long loud wail of Master Five echoed throughout the Show.
I heard the howl - high-pitched and scared (and that ride it was so slow)
and, when Master Five stepped off the train, his face was as white as snow.
His eyes were wide and huge in his head. His skin was almost transparent.
The jaunt had been no joy for him. I felt the worst of parents.
I watched them as they ran to me, no longer so grown and big.
I spread my arms out open wide, and held tight both my kids.
And Senior Seven stood brave and strong ('tho his legs shook to the utmost)
‘That's the last time I ride with him. He scared me more than the ghost!’
Comments
Dear Judyanne,
This sounds like the Roller Coaster ride from Hell! I'm scared to death of those things. Won't catch me near one! Your storytelling prowess is mighty, as usual. I find no fault with any of the lines, only appreciation for the work!
love, Cat (& eddy)
dearest cat
thank you so very much for the lovely comment
hope you are over your flu
love and hugs
judy
xxx
Judyanne
Loved this piece it held a mystery and screamed out the solution,
Yours, Ian.T
thanks ian
lol - he screamed alright :)
love judy
xxx
you are a Piscean with the sea behind you inyour refrain
write about the sea robbers
what they call them
pirates
then i will read all your lovely poetry
my latest refrain
''This universe has no beginning,
no end
that we mortals can claim knowledge of '''
Loved
i'm not sure
what you are saying loved
do you really want me to write about pirates?
what a funny thing to say...
love judy
xxx
Yes you are a Piscean
you love water
live near water
love rain
and so when you compose,
with water as your refrain
poetry will come out as
dew... then twill pour ....don't believe me
just try will you
''This universe has no beginning,
no end
that we mortals can claim knowledge of...'''
Loved
i see
yes, i am aware of that loved
i am always near water
xxx
How we love them.
Worthy of a fairy tale,
told with such sureness
of touch and feeling,
we sense the whole completely
as if those children were our own.
How we love them.
I have had none of my own,
but each and every kindergarten child
I have loved,
all different from each other,
all loveable.
Like you, judyanne
annanya
thank you dear annanya
for the very lovely comments
hugs
judyanne
xxx
kids are a pleasure
they may be your neighbours' or maids
but all kids are just the same ...
hungry for love
they ever remain
any ones kids
yours or mine.
are mine.