Tam the Chanter
Tam the Chanter
Jun 02, 2012
This poem is part of the workshop:

Rhyme Crimes

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The Well of Life

THE WELL OF LIFE
by Ian Thomson
My Life, as far as I can tell,
Is like a stone dropped down a well.
It falls free, with uncaring speed,
Yet seems to hold all that I need.

But I know that quite soon the noise;
Those echoes of my woes and joys,
Will disappear like winter geese
As I, with weary splash, find peace.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: GBR

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Comments

Roscoe Lane

Tam this is a cracker, sad but very good indeed. Regards Roscoe...

S

I especially like the winter geese line (might even steal it at some point lol). All the rhymes seem perfect to my uneducated ear..........stan

wesley snow

Who cares about the rhyming exercise. This is a bloody eulogy or something. Like a Western haiku. I will have to keep this one. wesley
Oh yes, the rhymes were sound. You pass.

judyanne

but i just have a slight problem with the rhythm in
'It falls free, with uncaring speed'
lol might sound better with your irish accent :)

of course, as you know the rhymes are perfect
love judy
xxx

wesley snow

One more time, please. Clarify? What is wrong with "speed/need" as a rhyming pair? wesley

judyanne

that this is at least the third time you have misread me wesley
what is going on?

is it pick on judy week or something and you've forgotten to tell me??

i mention nothing about rhyme here - read RHYTHM

cheers