brittle light
brittle light
Jun 04, 2012

The Tragic End Of My Love Life

she left a note:

you're a mean ol' man
I ain't comin' home
you don't buy me no shoes

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Comments

judyanne

haven't you heard that we woman no longer agree to being tied barefoot to the kitchen sink al?

i like this - short with heaps intimated
and i love the verbal tic used
gave me a smile

love judy
xxx

brittle light

glad you lol'ed...and got it! I never know how these eccentric little pieces will play...i.e. was enough information presented ...I do like it when minimal pieces work...I am basically lazy, and prefer short pieces...but concise concepts
don't always show up out of the blue, and it seems to take as much, or more, effort to actually finish one...a dilema!

thanks again for your input

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 10 months ago

Don't you believe a word Judy said about sinks and ties,
Why did we invent those Tie wraps and Gaffer Tape lol
Grand piece you have there now go out and by her some slippers, white ones so they don't clash with the washing machine and all the other appliances LOL..
I can feel a lot of flack forming over my head, Yours Ian.T

PS;- There is a hit man from Mother care at the door who sent him and what for?????