Red Brother

i really like the title
excellent rhyme
great meter but there are a couple of lines I feel are slightly ‘off’
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‘‘I will truly look around’ – meter out (to my ear I stress)
maybe shorten ‘I will’ -- ‘I’ll truly look around’
also ‘truly’ sounds strange to me in this context – even though I know what you mean,
does ‘carefully’ say the same thing for you?
‘I’ll carefully look around’ ?

‘And that I play on sacred ground’ – again – meter out
perhaps if you did something with the previous line to lead into this one it might read better?
my suggestion….
‘I know by your museums,
I intrude on sacred ground.
(or 'i play on sacred ground' if you want to keep 'play')

I really like the finish
‘Thank you for your patience,
Forgive us our condition’

love judy

Good title! It sets the tone for the poem. I found that this sentence bothered me a little bit:

And that I play on sacred ground.

I think you could remove the word "that" as it seems to be unnecessary. Other than that the poem flows very well with an easy rhymes scheme. I really like the first verse and how it drew me into the poem:

Thank you for your service,
Your guidance and your grace.
Thank you for our history.
Your welcome to this place

always, Cat

I am reminded each time I find a stone spear point of arrow head that these forests I love so much have been inhabited for 1000's of years before we got here. I really liked this. About the only change I'd make is to correct your to you're in line 4. The meter might be slightly off here and there but in my opinion it adds to the natural feeling flow of this..........................stan