AnnaNJ
AnnaNJ
May 02, 2012

Something Special

I've always wanted to be known
as the girl who was always laughing.
Someone carefree and whimsical.
A voice that can make you float to the clouds
and lay there next to her
not worrying of how much time has passed
and spending forever
telling stories and dancing through the sky
because nothing else mattered.

A girl with a smile that told a story
that would inspire and refresh you.
Her presence made the air feel lighter
and the night sky glow.
She made your day brighter
with a simple tune she hummed to herself
and you caught yourself singing along
and you didn't want to stop.

But to have happiness like that,
I think, could never be possible
and that girl could never exist
except in my mind's eye
and in the poems I write.
But even to her as a work of fiction
is better than not at all.
And for that,
I can never stop writing her.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Indiana, USA

Favorite Poets: Gabriel Gadfly

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Comments

Nordic cloud

I smile as i know the feeling in, through, underneath,
its spring that of the step out into the daytime sunshine,
its wish to remain in the euphoria it brings,
and why not,
this is not insuperable,
its all a question of attitude,
this I have found out,
one's attitude to life permeates all
and even goes towards the healing of ills,
mental or physical.

Lovely thoughts come with this poem,
you take her with you wherever you go,
she will help you see when tears blur your sight,
that's what this says to me AnnaNJ.

LoveAnn.

R

raj

12 years 11 months ago

Just like Ann...it made me smile too while reading your free flowing write expressive of your nature..personality..in simple yet effective manner...everyone has a fantasy and i loved the way you expressed it,....i could feel the buoyancy of your spirit too and your flair for using poetry as a means of expression...i enjoyed the experience..and will keep following your posts...