loved
loved
Apr 13, 2012

We will meet again ..What do you say?

at some corner of eternity
and
then as two petals of roses
in pages of books
we shall meet
to again fall apart
like autumn leaves
and
fly away towards
another trinity

that's why they say
time alone lives
we all perish

thank you friend,
for ripening my colloquial mind
excuse me for words mistakenly used,
it’s my creativity
my extempore muse...

I don’t visualize anyone,
but the hearts inner
and
compose...

Then after a while
in the library of time
I place,
all that
un-knowningly
my mind does trace...

A MODIFIED VERSION HERE...

We Will Meet Again
At some corner of eternity
as two petals of roses
in pages of books
We shall meet
to again
fall apart

Like the autumn leaves
shall fly away towards
another trinity
That’s why they say
time alone lives
we all perish

Thank you friend,
for ripening my colloquial mind
Excuse me for words mistakenly used,
my creativity likes
my extempore muse

I don’t visualize anyone,
but the hearts inner
to compose
After a while
in the library of time
I place
all that un-knowingly
my mind does trace

DO ENJOY TWO VERSIONS ...

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ROU

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Comments

loved

have I the ability to pen such words
hope Jess is eaves dropping
ere he does curse

But i wish to thank you
for reading,
nay hearing
my outspoken verse...
free one

Nordic cloud

A wonderful poem.
Nordic cloud.

Could have left out disposal of anything,
that's what gets at us,
self pity.

loved

coming from you
My regards Ma'am...
shall try and amend
as suggested
thanks again

K

Dear Loved were that every human being knew that they are loved. The universe itself loved us into being. What do we have to do to prove it to ourselves? And so the world is the way it is, and so we are the way we are/are not.

Mt. Kailash is a holy mountain. In this sense we are all making a pilgrimage up and down our own mountain of life.
It is a sacred journey for many.

http://sacredsites.com/asia/tibet/mt_kailash.html

D

In the library of time... a beautiful and effective phrase indeed. A lovely piece indeed.

ThanX for sharing

John

M

Hello there. I took my own liberty and touched it up but YOU DO NOT have to change it. I just felt like working it. It is very nice and yes it speaks to the inner.

We Will Meet Again

At some corner of eternity
as two petals of roses
in pages of books
We shall meet
to again
fall apart

Like the autumn leaves
shall fly away towards
another trinity
That’s why they say
time alone lives
we all perish

Thank you friend,
for ripening my colloquial mind
Excuse me for words mistakenly used,
my creativity likes
my extempore muse

I don’t visualize anyone,
but the hearts inner
to compose
After a while
in the library of time
I place all that
un-knowingly
my mind does trace

Loved - please do not think you have to change any of your poem to my suggests. I just tightened it up a bit.

Ms Mona

M

I only tried this to try and wean out some of the filler words. Say less with the same meanings. Filler words are all the repetions of the and's and the's.

It makes it too easy. Less is always better in some poems, I suppose. It might not work for everyone you know?

Thank you for commenting back. Keep up the good work. You have gotten better I see. That is a good thing.

Mona