Tommi Cordial
Tommi Cordial
Apr 09, 2012

Creations From Home

Come and join me
Here in my home
Where i welcome you all
Where i still sit alone

Creating Creations of joy and folly
Creations of heart
And Seasonal holly

Come in and get comfy
In my North Country home
Where body and mind
co-mingle whats sewn

Creations of style
Creations of hope
Of paint and canvas
Of beads and hemp rope

From fine fancy dresses
To cute garden gnomes
From jewelry hand-made
and orchards fresh grown

Come share whats baked
What's glued and what's sewn
Come just to stop in
On my North Country home...

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I just wanted people to know that I do more than just write in my retirement, I hobby-craft, journal, paint, and sculpt...I guess it just depends how i feel that day...Enjoy

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York, U.S., USA

Favorite Poets: RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison

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Comments

Tommi Cordial

That is Orchards as I have a seasonal veggie stand where I sell art and produce from local farmers and artists. I'm hopin to open a full-time gift shop with my saved profits within the next couple years...All my products come from the tri-county are within 100 miles of my home. As for the lower case I's. I write everything in lower case to remind myself that self editing is a kind of no-no but it keeps me on my toes when others mention it...thank you i missed some i think lol

Tommi Cordial

i am selling flowers and flower arrangements as i start my selling season with mother's day as a goal start. :)

Tommi Cordial

I also have a couple blogs posted as was suggested by a member. I can't recall who (maybe even you) If you'd like to check them out. One is a poem and the other just a speech I wrote should I ever decide to run for president...that is in the blog so people don't think i'm some kind of political windbag :) Just throwing it your way to see another example of my style.

Cloudthings

Nice Tommi. I hope you are also still singing (I think a singer never can stop if they can at all help it!)

I love the sound of this scenario, well painted in your poem (& indeed, feel quite akin, I am also a maker of things, any chance I get... creativity & sharing, they go so well together don't they).

You have framed such a comfortable picture of generous fecundity here, very welcoming.

Cheers
Anni

Candlewitch

May I make afew suggestions on this reptured write? (which I much enjoyed)

Suggestion:

use some other words for create and creation,along with them, such as: compositions, works, piece , production. prose, poetry, etc.

I liked these lines:

Come in and get comfy
In my North Country home
Where body and mind
co-mingle whats sewn

always, Cat

Tommi Cordial

I wrote this with the intention of making a plaque of it and hanging it in my Business office when my renovations were done. I do appreciate your noticing the artistic reputation as it is designed to bring customers back with a comfy homy feeling.
Thank you again your attention to detail leaves me glad to have the attention of one so wise :)