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in a drift
I notice, but forget
long term memory disengaged
I bet some nice poems
are still a'float in there
somewhere
alone
never even bumping into each other
what happened?
they might ask
he couldn't find a pencil?
the cream of the crop
made of our own volition
out of whole cloth
the best he has to offer
but, because he can't remember
"save to long term memory mode"
we are all lost,
never to land on a page
or in a song
left adrift in this boundless sea of
everything else ever forgotten
...and that's a whole, whole lot!
you'd think he would have learned
by now
how the hell did this poem make it .....
Comments
I definitely...
would like to see this expanded. ~ Gee
took your advise....It's
took your advise....It's bigger now!...hopefully, more satisfying.
so glad you spoke up, It's good having a second set of ears, eyes, minds....
thanks for keeping me on my toes,. I can get a little hasty with the submit button!
later,
drifting
No telling how many writes are lost due to lack of opportunity to capture them while they are fresh on poet's mind. The only minor change I would make would be in spacing at one spot :
somewhere drifting
alone
never even bumping....
I think isolating " alone " would add emphasis to it's meaning, course that's just my opinion lol..........scribbler