Memoirs

watering memory, a strong metaphor I have never heard or seen used in this way before.
twill you amaze - is this a typo (till you amaze)? as I am not a native speaker, some expressions may be unfamiliar to me. do let me know what you mean, I'm trying to improve my vocabulary... :)
I can't believe no one has commented on this, for I find it to be a strong write. I seem to enjoy your style, your flow and will surely be reading more!
I see that you published this as a rough draft so I would like to suggest something: I stumbled over the second and third fade at the end. if you are not all too attached to them, maybe you could try out another word with a similar meaning. I find the last line to be a strong one, so maybe you could change the first and second fade? I know that the last part will no longer rhyme but I feel that it is strong enough to stand on its own, without the emphasis a rhyme would put on it. I hope you do not mind the feedback and suggestions...
another read I enjoyed!
your Proprietress

what are we but our memories? I see the fade repeat has already been mentioned and I have no critique to add. I think this may well be one of your better poems but this Is coming from a non-expert at your type writing.......stan

a great revision.
what do you think? does it read more smoothly?
I like the flow now, just stumbled over the away-away rep:
memories will never vanish away - see how it feels without the away in this line. but that is just a matter of taste :)
I enjoyed coming back to this one and re-reading!
your Proprietress

I know this poet.
You made the corrections Proprietress and Scribbler suggested. I agree with all but one.

Proprietress? Did you get an explanation on "twill"? If so ignore me, if not then... "twill" is a contraction of "it will". Personally I would have left it as I love the use of older conventions. And you (Loved) used it appropriately... many will add the apostrophe at the beginning ( 'twill) which is not quite "incorrect", but commonly an apostrophe at the front of a word is omitted.
This one belongs in my Loved Library. A bit of understated potency.
wesley

this is a wonderful write
memories, some would say, are all that we are...
' memories.
mundane ,horrific and wonderful'
... for the remembrance of the past
does not ever evanesce
but does last
till memory is watered...' - i love that concept...

one tiny thing re the set out of the last lines (imho)
'they always will stay
until life,
itself fades away.'
- imho the words 'life' and 'itself' belong together...
i think i would prefer
' they always will stay
until life itself
fades away'.

thanks for sharing
love judy
xxx

Yes my freind this one hits the spot, lovely poem with a deep meaning. Been away working a while and it's great to read this as one of the first on my return. Regards Roscoe..