BEQUEST

Let me hear your laughing voice
each night before I go to bed
and see the shadow of your form
elegant as the day we wed

I like to brush that hair aside
which tends to drop and hide your eyes
and saying something off the cuff
which catches you by pure surprise

And frowning at your puzzle book
on the couch as I sit here and write
in your old tee shirt and stained sweat pants
beneath the floor lamp's cozy light

After all these days and years
I stiil wonder how it came to be
someone as wonderful as you
can still put up with such as me

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

you old romantic fart,

I loved this very much in the simplicity of it. It looks like every long time member of NP has been writing of late in a simplictic form. isn't the trend interesting.
well to just be a pain, what's up with this line:

"I stiil wonder how that it can be"

I have to say it kind of tongue tied me.
Eddie
...

hahahahhahaaaaaaaaaaa

Hi loved

I suspect she hangs around to see what I'll do next lmao.........stan

What hopes at your age

she is and must be
the leader at this age
too late perhaps my friend
either of you have no option
so stay together
and be- friend
till the last days
finally do end..
LOLOLOL
HAHAHA