Remnants of palaces owned once
I have seen
as in shadowed screams ,
as hallucinations
which once were dreams
and
since the emergence of time,
I still see the shadows
dark and still….
cobwebs of my mind,
but my nerves such occurrences don't kill
as I am the steel
behind caged minds,
holding my own hand,
as in the loneliness
of darkened ravines
I alone stand,
hopefully
no one can me kill!
Mar 27, 2012
Curious
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
A gem!
Lucid, meaningful! I hate it when you dribble repetitive trite rhymes and say nothing worthwhile. This was worth waiting for.
I wonder about the last line. Apart from the bad grammar 'nothing can kill me'. Surely that's not true? Are you referring to your immortal soul? (a question of faith much disputed)
Modified the GEM- ONE
Thanks after a long time you walk my way
I want you to kindly list 51 gems,
I want to publish a poems book
And
Sale proceeds will go to
CANCER SOCIETY.
Would you like to help me please?
You are that gem
I honor most,
as you are the only one and foremost
who could throw the pail at me
and
yet not let me fail
or else by now I'd be in jail
I regard you as the most superior one
life is not so young
and
soon I may not be with all of you
as you would see for good.