Rainy Day
Rainy Day
Mar 25, 2012

When I Am Old

What strength will you give me,
When I am old and frail,
When I want to do things,
That my body won’t let me,
What strength will you give me?

What warmth will you bestow me,
When I am tired and weak,
When my bones ache with cold,
That won’t leave me,
What warmth will you bestow me?

What kindness will you show me,
When the days are drawing near,
When my memory has failed,
And you don’t understand me,
What kindness will you show me?

Will you still love me,
If my body be broken down,
After all the dreams that came true,
And things I long yet to do,
Only you to sleep beside me,
Will you still love me?

Will you stay with me,
Through it all,
Will you hold my hand,
Meet me in the promised land,
Will you pray with me,
Will you stay with me,
When I am old?

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The South, US, USA

Favorite Poets: William Blake

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Comments

S

Really lovely. The only thing I can nit pick is the possible overuse of me. But that's really stretching. Felt compelled to answer your questions :
The strength will be the strength of will
to scale yet one more rocky hill
the warmth will be that of desire
a neverending well stoked fire

Kindness will be that returned
from those whom you have never spurned
the love will be solid and deep
and pure enough to make men weep

The devotion will be to not say never
and it too shall last for ever

*as an aside don't fear to punch the raw truth button . Few here actually ever knock anybody on their back lol.........stan

loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

''Wait for me ''

got lost in the
Neopoet's catastrophe

....And things I long yet to do,
Only you to sleep beside me,
Will you still love me?...
remember the
YOUTHFUL RAINS
and you will continue
to smile with or without ..

Candlewitch

I really love your pen name! A pensive poem always holds my inteerest. Well done!

always, Cat

China Blue

All of the questions you ask. Only time has the answer to. I am a fortunate one that has been smiled on. I do have all of that.
Beautifully penned verse calm easy to read and just rolls on

Rainy Day

Thank you all so much for the kind comments. I love your answers stan. I will have to use that button more often, lol. You are right. Everyone I have met here has been very respectful. Don't see that often on other sites.