scribbler
Nov 08, 2010

POEM'S PROGRESS ( via Haiku series )

A blank page staring
challenging me to fill it
with words of beauty

Mind searching for words
and thoughts to write in order
to form an image

Pen hand writes with care
to space and spell correctly
an eye-pleasing work

Then the moment comes
to share thoughts and words aloud
awaiting response

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Seems I can't write Haiku without it being a series lol

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 4 months ago

Stan,

I have recently started to enjoyed the challenge of Haiku...what seems simple on the face of it, ends up being a difficult task indeed.

I enjoyed these Haiku's, but you'll need to look at:

and phrases to write in order (1+2+1+1+1+2)

which has 8 syllables.

I noticed this last night and have been thinking of an alternative for you...many hours later, I have a solution of sorts:

Mind searching for words
and phrases to pen in line
to form an image

I have never written poetry before and had to count on my fingers!! Lol!

Sorry for finding the error, it wasn't my intention.

Cheers,

HS

S

scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

In reply to by Hooded Stranger

My semester of calculus apparently didn't prepare me for counting syllables lol. Thank You for finding this faut as it enables me to correct it....................scribbler

loved

loved

14 years 4 months ago

informs me japanese haikus

were actually meant to appreciate nature .

well he says first line

and third line are interchangeable

i'll ask him if i can post the analysis he gave

or better still ask him to do it

if u say so

but ur CREATIVITY IS UNIQUE
5 7 5

5
7
5

5 7 5

S

I also read his explanation of Haiku the other day.Just what Haiku needs : more restrictions lol. I expect "unique" can be interpreted as nobody else would do such. Always good to hear from you..................scribbler