Crushed Velvet
Plunging into
the crystal clear waters
many secrets hiding
under the luscious
sapphire pools
of lonely
indigo shadowed desire
meets with delicious
subaqueous forests
of rich emerald
crushed velvet desire
revealing a haven
of beautiful acceptance
where the starlit silence
of her fairy
childlike devotion
pure and resplendent
in a swirl of melding
this tide pool of loving...
the meridian of the soul
Last Few Words: a poem from the manuscript "Mirror/rorriM"
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Dear Lonnie,
Thank you. I do so appreciate your faithful reading and commenting on my poems. Any suggestions you may have are very welcome.
always, Cat
It s so splendid
It s so splendid to read you
hope some day
you would like to read me too
perhaps in a similar vein
and
accept my poetic acclaim
only perhaps
WOW
what an extraordinary view...
in a swirl of melding
this tide pool of loving...
the meridian of the soul
Dear loved,
Thank you! And I do enjoy reading your writes. I just don't always know what to say, but that is my failing, not yours.
always, Cat
You are so kind, I must add
and
what is that word
it escapes my mind,
i shall add it once
it returns
Ah! yes
U N A S S U M I N G
YEAH GOT IT !
Crushed Aelvet
a very enjoyable read...........how i so much wanted to plunge into those clear waters and experience the crushed velvet.....................!
Willy
Dear Willy,
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the reading of this poem.
always, Cat
Beautiful
I love the imagery of this poem. Its beautiful. I can see the colors in my mind. Love it!
Cat
As the others have said a lovely group of words.
A picture of Velvet being crushed by anything reminds me of many things.
A gentle pressure of reclining people a touch of a hand to see if it is really smooth and many things that send out a message that Velvet is unique, and such a joy to touch.
A gem held in its arms letting the Velvet enhance its beauty, so many things,
Yours Ian.T