emogothgirl
emogothgirl
Mar 21, 2012

Burn

I guess it’s over now
But what else can I expect?
All of those days you left me
Waiting on your front door steps
There’s no point in asking how
So here’s my heart for hire
I’ll look until my eyes roll back
Until I find that fire

Burn

I’m going up in flames
To ashes in the air
All my life was cold and now
It seems like you don’t care
This heat is getting heavy
Pressure on my head
You meant to call my name
You said “lover” instead

The promises we made
In notes and in the creases
Love you all to bits
If you would love me to pieces
Yes, that’s what I’m doing now
I’m just falling apart
I’m bad at breathing through the night
Teach my lips how to start

About This Poem

Last Few Words: i honestly have no idea what this is; it kinda just came out. suggestions welcome!

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: somewhere in the middle of the mountains, USA

Favorite Poets: life.

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Comments

Starlight

always creeping up and stealing the spotlight like maggies do. I really like this one a lot. andddd we both like to write about fire! :D hehe i lurve this a lot. in face, im going to go read it again right now.

Starlight

i didn't mean stealing the spotlight, i mean like ... i didnt mean it in a mean way. :( its just really good and deserves to be taught in an english class somewhere, someday.