scribbler
Mar 13, 2012

WHERE I'LL BE

Should you think to look for me
some day after I have gone
the grave is not where I shall be,
of that you can depend upon.

Why would you hope I would be bound
to bones and dessicated flesh
mouldering in the cold dark ground
where the winds never blow fresh?

Look for me in a chill sunset
at the end of a cold winter day
when the moon has not quite risen yet
to announce the end of day.

Or look about in early morn
as the sun wipes sleep from glowing eye
just as the day is being born.
Listen hard, I'll be nearby.

Anywhere the trees grow tall
and whippoorwills repeat their name;
where people seldom walk at all
and rolling hills are filled with game.

Hear me whisper through the wind,
smell muscadines upon my breath.
My lack of life won't be my end,
I'll still be around after my death.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

China Blue

Sad but beautiful. As always perfect rhyme

S

Well, I was trying for uplifting lol. But one has no control how something is interpreted once it's released. Thanks for visiting...........stan

loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

going to die
down some lonesome valley
where Loved and Stan shall be waiting for thee

So sing with us Tom Dooley
where we all shall be......

your best in my view so far............ If you let me be audacious enough to say..... Stan u r the only MAN...!!!!!!!!

...;;;;''''Or look about in early morn
as the sun wipes sleep from glowing eye
just as the day is being born
listen hard, I'll be nearby
AS THE ''WOODS'' GONE BYE....

Gracy

Gracy

4 years 10 months ago

Stan, it's a beautiful, melancholy poem. You've perhaps taken Christina Rossetti's "Remember" to help your own muse. The rhyming is perfect, to my imperfect knowledge. Not so sure about the title. All else has been deftly worked and a pleasure to read.
Thanks for sharing, all the best, Gracy

S

I sometimes edit a number of my stuff at one time and I'm always a bit surprised when doing so leads to further comments. appreciate your dropping by