My Savior

This is very beautiful, a tribute to your family, and Dancing on the stage which seems that you love. I like that you use these things to be your savoir. The title of the poem had at first put me off, because I do not believe in a religous savior, but as you I believe that there are many things in my life that have had a sort of saving grace. (I do not believe in a God persay). I truly enjoyed your poem it is well constructed, the rhythm does work in some spots for me. that's just my opinion.Oh by the way my girl friend is a ballerina, She teaches Master classes in LA she was trained in the Vinccanzo Celle in New York.
Welcome to Neopoet, I hope to read more of your beautiful work. I do hope you just don't write in freeverse. If you do, this is the place to learn to write in different forms. this is the best workshop for poetry on the internet.
Again Welcome to our family, hope you stay a while.

Eddie

This I loved, the idea of it very particular, and neatly clear to the reader.
Loved the humour: " the hugs, the laughter, the love, and the cheese"

Not quite happy with these lines: "All that's left is a myriad of movement expression"

I felt you had danced your theme in words, nicely.
Welcome lights of the north, from Ann of Norway.

I almost didn't read, because of the title. I avoid religious writes as much as I can. But I'm glad I took the time to get past it and read the content. Maybe "Champion" or "Life's Blood" or "My Passion" would make a better title. These are just suggestions, of course. I think you could have made this into two poems. One about the people and the other about your love of dance. I especially enjoyed these lines:

The curtains open, the hot spotlight is on you
The audience is awaiting their entertainment
But that disappears the moment I perform the first step
All that's left is a myriad of movement
expression
And the exhilaration is all you feel
You forget you are performing
You are just living
Dancing is My Savior

welcome to the site!
always, Cat

Welcome to the asylum lol. For a fellow beginner ( and we're ALL beginners until we achieve something perfect) this is a very nice explanation of saviors being all around us...........stan

the title confused me a little, but i got it when i read the whole thing. don't underestimate yourself love, you've got some ink in your blood. the people here will guide you, and try to help when they can, and sometimes they won't need to, but you can always trust they'll be honest and that they're good people, even jess :) a little advice? log in. take up all the feeling and ball it up in your chest. close your eyes. breathe it all out.
always and forever to the city and back
mag
welcome to neoland
and do your homework ♥

I stopped finally to see what a poet
had written about their role model
(I was expecting to read about Jesus
as this is the most formatted word for
saviour in western traditions, but..)

I read this poem
and found it to be very well written
not bad at all

and then I thought how apt the title is
for principles and ideals
about the basic love for each other
as brother and sister parent to child
our most intimate guides towards
creating a good ideal about encouraging
a better world

those were and are the original teachings
I was raised with as a child
and I can say that we fell far short in the
end..but there are glimmers of that
strength of good

To have a gift and to have a family bond
that backs and uplifts is refreshing to
read
qualities of that kind of example are ones
to look toward and emulate

after reading your poetry it made me
think and expand todays thoughts
about that solid teachings of ideals
I think I can dust them off like gold

I think your title is very appropriate!

Thank You!