emogothgirl
emogothgirl
Feb 24, 2012

A Tab For The Heartstrings

out of six strings
the girl has two
she knows what she wants
and that seems like nothing
she's cluless in her perfect world

out of six strings
the girl has four
she knows what she thinks is need
no one has changed like she swears they have
and he has done nothing wrong

out of six strings
the boy has eight
i know he cares
he just doesn't know what to do
or what to say

out of six strings
the girl has ten
she cares like no other
and everyone else comes first
i'll keep her secrets 'til my end

out of six strings
my love has twelve
a different love is ours
it will be the death of me
but not today

out of six strings
i don't know what she has
i'm sure she has many
but she never told me that

and i don't know her yet.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: a true but sometimes harsh note on my friends; some of them true and some of them not, some of them undecided.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: somewhere in the middle of the mountains, USA

Favorite Poets: life.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Good title. I like the content. An imaginative way to log and compare your relationships. Great language use. Loved the metaphors. Favorite lines:

out of six strings
my love has twelve
a different love is ours
it will be the death of me
but not today

always, Cat

Starlight

you got me in a trance. so amazing i envy you. love you muchly. :)