SILENT DEATH

Man! I've got a gassy dog,
a dauchund shaped just like a log,
who likes to lie about and fart.
He's got it right down to an art.

Silent but deadly is his way
(he could run a skunk away).
Maybe it's a sign he's older;
his gas has gotten worse and bolder.

All the walls are now off-white,
no longer are they pure and bright,
but we save on insecticide.
The bugs that don't die run and hide.

He can empty out a crowded room
quicker than the clap of doom
a methane type of tidal wave
enough to send you to your grave.

Sniff....well there he goes again,
so I'll hold my breath and strain
to get out another line
before I have to.............aaaaarrgh!

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Style/Type: Structured: Western

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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Comments

Love it!

Not wussie at all and hilarious, yet with depth, yes, depth, he is nearing death and you have incorporated that sad fact so subtly. A fine poem.

Hi Jess

If it makes you smile it achieved its goal lol. Just remembered I promised to post a social commentary poem. Reckon it'll have to wait for tomorrow now.............stan

hi Mark

Just shows poetry can explode from anywhere lol...........stan

..a fun comic strip or short film.

And I have just written about a fart, from an old lady but the dog got the blame!!
You wag Stan, good fun.
Dachshund? We had one called Missy, or "Miss Otis....regrets she's unable to lunch today, Madame...etc" I know the character of them, darned independent and very loveable.
Would make a fun comic strip or short film.

Ann :)

Hi Ann

Our dog is named Oscar as in Oscar Meyer Weiner dog lol. Glad you got a chuckle..........stan

Dear Stan,

He can empty out a room
quicker than the clap of doom
a methane type of tidal wave
enough to send you to your grave

my cats fart too! it is worst when they are in my lap and let one of those silent but deadly ones loose! It permiates the whole room! Phew...

good poem!

always, Cat