Riddles,,, Master of Confusion

*suggestion:

in this line: Like wool of cotton

I would change it to silk or satin becaue wool tends to be a little rough and cotton is not that smooth.

Precious than silver
(more) precious than silver?

I liked these lines most:

But you can choose wise
Only come into my garage
and service your wits
Ridicule me not
Though master of confusion

always, Cat

This, of course, confused me a bit. Then it didn't satisfy because it seemed unfinished. Remember that EVERY poem (not just the stories) must have the four components. They are used a little more loosely, but without an exposition or resolution the poem is muddled. Sometimes that is what we want, what we strife to create and in much of this I see that attempt. The reader is to be somewhat confused, but without a resolution however small that brings a little clarity to what we are reading it leaves the poem unsatisfying.
I inferred much of the puzzle as any reader would, but it could have used a little more straight out explanation... even if couched in mystery.
wesley

experimentation is a poet's lifeblood. wesley

William Faulkner once said (and I paraphrase) that when first you write, just write. Don't think. Just write. I use this as a maxim. When I am writing my epic, I already have the story line figured out in advance. In fact I have so much of it lain out that I don't allow myself to brainstorm unless absolutely necessary in fear I will come up with yet ANOTHER cool idea and turn this behemoth into a planet size monstrosity.
However, AS I write I just write. I allow the story to create itself as it goes. Some of my best story ideas have come from spur of the moment creation.
Here's the other side of that coin. Endless Revision. This something I learned from Gary Lutz, a grammarian. Nothing that I write is finished. I am in the process of editing some part of the big poem at all times. When I catch up to the end, I start over. Therefore, the piece will ALWAYS represent the poet that I am today.
So when you write, just write. Don't concern yourself with grammar, meter, rhyme, you'll fix those later. Just write and produce the emotional. Mechanics are merely time consuming. Granted, the better your grammar, meter, spelling, blah, blah is in the beginning the less you have to repair later. This is why I have trained myself in the poetic forms. I need them to be natural enough so I may JUST WRITE and not be so far off I have to deconstruct everything to bring it up to speed.
So all of this extra wordy stuff boils down to... don't be afraid to let the poem write itself. You're going to edit it endlessly anyway.
wesley

I won't crit minor flaws, what I will do is say that you have an an amazing range of ability.

You have my total respect.

I will answer for you.
"Thank you Jess for your kind words and you're absolutely correct. I have a marvelous range of emotional depth. A very large array of poetic types and forms seem within my grasp. I know also that I have an innate sense of the dramatic without the use hyperbole. Thank you for noticing."
wesley for
WonderGolly:)

You don't have to be fighting with a second language to have that problem. Note my problems of late with assonance/consonance.
Start proofreading your comments.
wesley