docmaverick
docmaverick
Feb 14, 2012

Total Aquareness

Leathered terrace that I cling to
enlists the true, eclectic me
sometimes shavin'
always cravin'
to see the forest through the tree;

I've seen rainbows and spied sunsets
that would make an angel cry
and I notice in the distance
I'll see that same light when I die;

for instance my own Mother
knows how short that I had fell,
sometimes we may see a heaven
from a view that includes hell;

tattered terrace that I long for
with a time that includes you,
so soft your touch
I miss so much
you are my favorite color, blue.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Almost time.......happy v. d.!

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

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Comments

Starlight

I really liked this very much. it was very aesthetic and emotional. and the title drew me in.
-Starlight

docmaverick

...way, that you shined "starlight" on my effort. Without your illumination, I'd have gone on believing for EVER....that, no-one had bothered to read it!
Sincerely, thanx;
doc.