scribbler
Nov 26, 2010

FORGOTTEN DREAMS

A pile of stones beside a field
of an abandoned , washed out farm
now bramble and brier its only yield.
A near deer snorts out its alarm.

A barn in collapse across the way
the forgotten victim of neglect
that once was full of life and hay
now bats are all it can collect.

Old rusted worn out rakes and plows
good now for naught but scrap
once created pastures for fat cows
discarded like a vague mishap.

Porch is slowly parting from the house
once full of dreams and love and life
now home to 'possum, 'coon, and mouse
and ghost of farmer's birth-slain wife.

The well is deep but it's gone dry
empty of all but noxious gas and spiders.
Un-recalled past days gone by
when cool water held water striders.

Even the family plot's a ruin
tilting iron fence and cracked head stones.
The only visitors now are buck and bruin
and wind which whispers, howls, and moans.

So like the rest I leave this place
down this old two track rutted road
with a steadily increasing pace
haunted by this failed old farm's load.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

S

This is an actual old farm where I used to hunt. The only fabrication being the family plot and the ghost. Thanks for coming by..........stan

S

Here in the south when cotton was king, there was a lot of land brought into cultivation that should have been left untilled. The scars of these decisions ( depleted top soil, huge gullies, and stony ground ) are still evident after 100 years. Coming across the remains of a hard scrabble farm where some poor family tried to better themselves is fairly common in the hinterlands.I had heard of ongoing drought in Australia and resultant wild fires. I am glad your drought has broken.................stan

M

Full of imagery
Brang the feeling to me
Just love this Stan you did a swell job here, nothing to crit!! You have come a long way writer

Love Mona
xoxo

S

I am so glad you enjoyed this little ditty. Good to see you on my page....................stan

Victorclaude

I couldn't help but think of Steinbeck's 'Grapes of Wrath' while reading this piece.

A sense of sadness pervades this piece, as only it should when describing this scene.

Well done~!

Victor

S

Sadness is the intent. Glad to have you comment...............scribbler

K

Stan, images of Steinbeck's Grapes....yes, Victor! YES!

"And still the family stood about like dream walkers, their eyes focused panoramically, seeing no detail, but the whole dawn, the whole land, the whole texture of the country at once."

mand

mand

14 years 5 months ago

So sad to come across these old building. There are many tiny old Welsh cottages where families of ten or twelved lived. I can only imagine what life must have been like in such cramped conditions. You have captured a sad and eeriee atmosphere in your poem Stan. Very well done!

I think a story could be made out of this one.

Lots of love Mand xxxxxx

S

Apparently the story has already been written "The Grapes of Wrath ". Am always glad to have conveyed what was intended..........stan

H

Brought back a flood of memories. I wanted so much to hold on to the last 41 of a 160 acres my Great grandfather homesteaded sometimes in the 1800's. Laziness, greed and family fighting did the land in. There is still a few old farm house around here. But most have been replaced with new houses or business. What was cotten fuilds just 20 years ago is now part of Shreveport. Progress/. Take Care. huey