Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Feb 14, 2012

A Desert So Heavenly

Senryu

Vanilla ice cream
Mouthwatering cake on top
Blueberry circle

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins

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Barbara Writes

getting the image to show
is what i wanted
glad it did even if
"images of little eyes standing around hungry, looking, wanting."
is what came through lol.

this dessert looked so good
i didnt wanna eat it
because its beauty would have been no more

but then, its taste was as good as its beauty
its taste still lingers in my mouth
yummy

Barbara Writes

Glad you think vagueness in the last line is a good feature
I trier to find a line of 5 syllable
To describe the blueberries place in a ciecle around the bowl place in the ice cream