t. reflexion
t. reflexion
Nov 23, 2011

YOMO NKUKU- The weird bird

The crooning broke through the silent night
Kids of a small settlement scamper with fear
What peripatetic spirit the dogs have seen
Night birds sang along, yomo nkuku ku-ku

You ate my food and laugh with relish
You eat yours and shed crocodile tears
Because you don’t want to share with me
A capon blubbered, yomo nkuku ku-ku

The hunter’s lamp cast its rays on the leaves
Reflecting on the eyes of a strange owl
Cold chill raise tiny hills on the skin
The seeker mimicked, yomo nkuku ku-ku

The night bird wants to share her sorrows
Moved its head back and forth to see
In the dark, what it couldn’t see in the day
A lonely bird sniveled, yomo nkuku ku-ku

Daylight blinds the evil eyes of the night
Like the light of knowledge to the dim-witted
Fear of the unknown cripples their self-control
They whimper a refrain, yomo nkuku ku-ku

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript

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Comments

Candlewitch

very imaginative! Best lines:

The night bird wants to share her sorrows
Moved its head back and forth to see
In the dark, what it couldn’t see in the day
A lonely bird sniveled, yomo nkuku ku-ku

Daylight blinds the evil eyes of the night
Like the light of knowledge to the dim-witted
Fear of the unknown cripples their self-control
They whimper a refrain, yomo nkuku ku-ku

always, Cat