Geezer
Geezer
Dec 11, 2011

Systematic Crashes...

I don't know why it happens
there is no warning, reason, rhyme
but crashes are drawn to me
they happen all the time

There should be some alarm
"This system's going to fail"
I could prevent a nervous break-down
and another computer-sale

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Written for Lou's Splash-Pool workshop.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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S

Reckon I covered all I wanted to say in workshop. Now if people want to know what was said they should have joined up lol............stan

lou

lou

13 years 4 months ago

Gee,

first of sll in my opinion, all that needs changing is the last line, maybe uou could say something like, 'another wiff of hysteria.

lou