A sworded conception
Doomed from the start
Your love was too strong
Lurid in its direction
Just a diversion in your mind
Yet blindly I went on
When you left
my life shattered into Infinity,
couldn't breathe without you
(chorus)
Ignite a carnal resurrection
Let me live again
Breathe
I am hanging on,
asphyxiating, on raw emotion.
Restore my voice.
Passion is my affliction
A terrible addiction
My drug of choice
Love has me in a choke hold
Inhale, exhale,
let me breathe again
Comments
Joe
Thank you, that is very kind of you. Why have given up writing ?
Lou
This will make a great song!!
I'd love to hear it!
Love Mand xxxxxxxx
Mand
I'm glad that you like it.
I couldn't sing if my life depended on it, my singing voice would make dogs howl LOL. So someone else would have to perform it.
Love Lou xx
Lou
Lou,
great song structure now, with your verses, two bridges and chorus. The extra verse you've added rounds it off really well. I like the change to the chorus better now too.
I look forward to you singing this one to me via MSN Messenger...I of course will take a copy of your performance and add it to the website for all to hear!!!...only kidding you my friend.
regards,
HS
HS
i'm glad you approve, thanks for helping me with this.
Trust me you don't want me to sing, not if you value your hearing.
Lou.
I can only say...
I hope that someone does sing it ! I'm not volunteering , my voice isn't that good either. [Of course after a few drinks, and some Kareoke, who cares?] But, I liked the raw emotion. Great work ! ~ love ya, Gee xxx
Gee
Thank you
love lou
Xena
Thanks Xena , your welcome to sing it, but not country style. Although I do love Patsy Cline, her voice and songs, make me cry.
lou
Hi Lou
Nothing to criticize.
I love the dichotomy between love and physical desire that I feel in reading this, and the helplessness and desperation of need.
Excellent poem, let alone song.
Jim
Thank you .
Love and desire, can be heaven and hell.
lou