For what intention
Do I live
Knowing of nothing
Of pure life
Or understanding death
Can the trees
Hear the music
Of the wind
Without any ears
Yet they dance
As the ocean
Loves the land
To such degrees
It caresses it
Day and night
Am I different
Among these things
I am universal
Connected to all
Yet all alone
I only answer
To my own
Heart and conscious
Can I hear
What is said
The worlds dream
Has clouded me
To simply believe
That I need
So much more
At the end
What will matter
Money and fame
Will always wane
Not true art
My true legacy
Is my art
I live it
And derive pleasure
When I write
Comments
3 words per line
very catchy. maybe changing line 'OF pure life' to something like 'on' or 'or'. the repeated 'of' throws me off a little. and last line- we all write about writing. fun stuff!
no changes
Thanks for the read and comment, it's appreciated
Eddie
A statement of intent...
... as it were. I also appreciated the limit to the line length. Well said.
wesley
wesley
a pleasure to see you on my page, thanks for the visit buddy.
Eddie
you always are
and have been
so different from all the rest of us
including me
you are just wonderful
loved,
I am appreciative of all who love the arts no matter the sphere they are in. Art is a process of creating and it's in all of us. The trick is to find your own voice. So my appreciation is for all ones here who have showed me the way to find my voice. they know who they are, and I thank them for their time and patience.
You are a good friend, and I am glad you take the time to read my ramblings.
Eddie
Eddie
the poem flows along quite well until we come to the last stanza, maybe you could change the last two lines to something like ,' for which i live and breathe and derive much pleasure'.
good stuff
lou
lou,
I am trying a new way of writing useing three words per line in a certain syllable count and hold to a tempo.
I like what you do with the last stanza, but I have to fiqure out how to say it keeping to the three words per line
thank you for the time you took to really look at it.
thanks for the "good stuff"
Eddie