themoonman
themoonman
Oct 18, 2011

Normality

I thought to write a thing of importance,
share a Zen moment, a euphoric epiphany,
but anger is too close, hating my own
differences ... so I seethe.

Weary of the graciously agitated,
leery of the over involved idiots
that tend to run things to ground,
outnumbering.
Slashing agenda swords, heading towards
that no return line, where you just have to roll with it,
arguing to the point of whatever the other says is wrong,
and nothing else matters
even if I think you have a point
even if I think ...
wait a minute,
no damn thinking,
maybe I am normal.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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Geezer

Geezer

13 years 6 months ago

epiphany as it blossomed into the Zen flower, and was mesmorized. This is one I wish that I had written.
~ Gee

K

Niiiice, Richard. We're on the same wave-length this morning it seems. But I think the word is normalcy .... and that's a misnomer. ;-)

hug.

~A

themoonman

that's the sweetest thing anyone ever called me,
a poet ... thanks Jess, I too feel this needs some
work, but I did like the ending (lowering my head
and kicking my other foot)

Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

I love the way this poem developes, unfolds,
my expectations kept twisting, this way then that,
the contrast between the title and first line is brilliant.
if this is still a draft, I would like to suggest taking the normal down a line, so that it is on its own. that way the title and last word will circle around each other. I think it would work for the poem, I'm just not sure if it would complement your personal style...
always enjoy reading your poetry, Mr Moonman, sir... you are a great poet :)
your Proprietress