Sun drenched soldier,
born from the tears of slaves
In these songs of freedom is where my salvation lays
Lost within your rhythm,
trying to save my soul
Fighting for humanity,
fighting for us all
Giving a voice to the poor,
the hungry, the weak
Shouting at those demons,
let my people be
Bonds of hate bleed our earth
Open up your heart,
See what life is worth
Feel the spirit calling us to unite
Come together on this burning earth,
let us feel alright
Come here brother man,
let me take your hand
Lift you from that coffin of hate,
buried beneath the sand
Sun drenched soldier,
born from the tears of slaves
In these songs of freedom is where my salvation lays
Guitar rhythms,
leading me to your light
I will never run
Beside you I shall fight
One love and Jah Bless
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Hello,
A very powerful poem, packed with raw emotion. It got my attention and held it throughout the whole poem. I like the title very much in its originality. My favorite lines are:
Come here brother man and let me take your hand
Lift you from that coffin of hate being buried in the sand
Sun drenched soldier, born from the tears of slaves
In these songs of freedom is where my salvation lays
always, Candlewitch
Have you put these lyrics
Have you put these lyrics into song yet? I'd so love to here the melody.
Thank you for sharing.
~A
I was actually planning on
I was actually planning on putting it into music sort of have a melody worked out but just want to polish the piece first.
Thank you very much guys i
Thank you very much guys i really appreciate it glad you like my work.
Nice
I would like to ponder on this one so I will be back and see if I can give you my suggests or critique and see what you think.
Good write and nice to meet you as well just the same
Mona
Just a quick once over here
Hello to you again
I worked it just a bit and if I could show you the changes it would be hard but read this and let me know if it read any bite better:)
Sun drenched soldier, born the tears of slaves
In these songs of freedom is where my salvation lays
Lost within your rhythm, trying to save my soul
Fighting for humanity, fighting for one and all
Give a voice to the poor, the hungry, the meek
Shout at those demons, let my people free
Bonds of hate bleed our earth
Open up your heart what life is worth
Feel the spirit calling you to unite
Come together on this burning earth, let us feel alright
Come here brother man, let me take your hand
Lift you from a coffin of hate, buried in the sand
Sun drenched soldier, born the tears of slaves
This song of freedom is where my salvation lays
Guitar rhythms oh lead me to the light
I will never run,
like you soldier, I will stay here and fight
I only make suggest you do not have to go by them. I think the story poem says enough upon the read and the feeling I got from it.
ciao
Mona
thanks
Thanks mona i did thik it needed some fine tuning ill look over your ideas