Bloodstone
Bloodstone
Sep 21, 2011

Flux

If I was lightning I'd burn out Sol,
And burn both retina of you all...

...To make a planet into a star;
Churning primeval consciousness
From the depths, to way out far.
Ascend, mere embers, to furnace.
Wrenching ancient fractal plains;
Fingertips blister and scar,
And heal to pain.

A fire, pure, without bias;
Like natures ‘customed trials,
Arching light made dark suffer,
Out from Asgards mountain halls.

Harmonious cacophony,
Intertwined melody,
Solar winds never rest.
Creator, Destroyer,
Dichotomous agent
At no one’s behest.

The sun sets in the east.
A Viking longboat beast,
Hidden in ripples and shimmer,
Takes to land from high seas.
Prey fight as dogs or be eaten.
Torches burn as light grows thin.

Light directed from pure energy
Through the optic omniverse,
An animal as are we,
Must contain the same burden of curse;
On our treacherous journey,
Past flesh expression of soul.
When our worldly activities cease,
We carry on through humanity.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: One of my really abstract pieces. You may understand, you may not understand, if you do understand you may be me... or I, you!

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Africa, ZAF

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Comments

Ladderwords

The last stanza is by far the strongest, but I enjoy your imagery throughout the piece. It is a tight poem even with some of the "easy" rhymes. I feel like ya really hit your stride mid poem. If you still plan on editing, I'd take a day or two and then take another stab at the second and third stanzas. Thanks for sharing!